The Hunters Try To Find Treasure

 Hello readers,

This term we have been learning to write narrative stories. The purpose of a narrative is to entertain the reader. First we had to make a plan. Then we had to make a document and start writing our actual story. We had to include similes, descriptive words, personification, characters and setting. One of my favourite sentences in my story is They saw a lime green, thick, tall bush shaped as a circle because it has lot's of describing words. One thing I could improve on is to write more describing words. Here is my story. I hope you like. Maybe give me some advice for next time. Bye, have a great day.

The Hunters Try To

Find Treasure

One day Abbie and Krystil were out in an enormous, expensive mall with lots 

of shops. They got ice cream and it tasted yum. Whilst eating, they decided to plan a treasure hunt. After their treat, they were in a shop called Hunter. They were buying outfits for themselves and their friends for the treasure hunt they were starting tomorrow.

When tomorrow came they called their other friends Annie and Josh, and invited them over. When their friends came they went to the bathroom and changed separately.  “I’m feeling nervous, ” Krystil mumbled. Everyone agreed.

It was the beginning of the journey and everyone was scared but prowled to the creepy, dark, huge forest and saw lots of wild baby animals. It smelt like wet bark and animal poop. They got their backpacks out and reached for their shiny, silver shovels that they gave each other last christmas and kept digging and digging but couldn't find the beautiful, golden, shiny, glossy, treasure. They felt hopeless. Josh commented, “We will never find the treasure.”apostrophes

Next they found a dark, huge, spooky cave and touched a part of the cave that felt dusty and dirty. After they travelled inside, they spotted huge bear footprints. Josh fearfully said “ It’s not very safe here, let's go back.” “Yeah”, Annie said, terrified. But everyone else declared “No, it’s amazing in this cave, we’re like hunters.”

Suddenly they started to hear the Dad bear growling. They all said “let's hide.” They hid but detected the bear family and were all horrified. They froze. They were stuck in the cave. Two cute, little baby bears, a bigger, scruffy, Dad bear and a medium size, scruffy, Mum bear were all sitting eating their porridge. Dad bear used his enormous nose to sniff around the cave. He could sense something. 

Annie, Josh, Abbie and Krystil attempted to creep out but the bears found them. They rushed out but the bears still followed them. They saw a lime green, thick, tall bush shaped as a circle and hid behind it and the bears couldn't find them so they moved away. When the bears were gone they were still scared. So they ran away and tried to find light. When they found light and rushed to it, it was just some people climbing huge trees with flashlights.

Abbie asked “Do you know where the city is because me and my friends are kind of lost. It would be helpful if you could please tell us.” So the people tell them and Abbie, Josh, Annie and Krstil go look in the distance and keep shifting until they find more and more people and then they find the city. Then they go home together contentedly because they escaped the forest. 

THE END.