Hello readers,
Today I will share my writing with you. Everyone in my class did it including me. It took us some time to do but we nailed it. We had to write a story about a tree house or an alien ship. I chose the tree house. I wrote a story about it and wrote descriptive words in it. Here it is. I hope you like it.
To support my learning I ask you to comment as follows:
1. Something positive - something you like about what I have shared.
2. Thoughtful - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what I had to say
3. Something helpful - how have you connected with my learning? Give me some ideas for next time or ask me a question.
Hi Rableen, i liked your writing but next time you could use paragraphs otherwise it was great bye.
ReplyDeleteKia Ora Rableen,
ReplyDeleteI like the way you wrote in your story "I thought it was a dream" that is very descriptive. The way you said "dark brown hair" you need to add some more descriptive words like "My dark brown wavy hair" I hope you have a great day.
Good afternoon Rableen,
ReplyDeleteI really like how you wrote your descriptive writing. While I was readying I felt like it was a dream to.I hope you have a great day bye bestie!