opening sentence for my story

Good morning. We are learning to write an interesting first sentence to hook our reader. My first sentence was Bang bang bang bang a boy with a dark blue jacket and rosy pink cheeks  was playing loud video games in his gloomy dark  small living room. it is called the present now here is my full story Bang!! bang!! bang!! bang!! a boy that was biting his bottom lip and with a dark blue jacket and rosy  light pink cheeks  was holding a dark black controller and was playing loud video games in his gloomy dark  small living room. The volume was maximum and He was very focused on the game and then his mum came with a brown  big box  that looked like cookie dough without chocolate chips.She said sorry hunny i had to pick up something from work and placed the brown big box in front of the boy but the boy was still playing games and The mom said honey open your present i got you and the phone started ringing so she picked it up. The boy said ;for me; he was so excited to open it that when he opened it he saw a puppy that was the same couler as the box but had some white. The dog was very happy and was sticking its head out. The boy was so surprised he picked it up  and saw that he had three legs he dident like so he put on a disgusting face. He throud  the dog on the floor but he dident give up he got back up and saw a red glossy ball he went to go get it but he hit himself on the white shiny shelf so he shaked himself then he went and lived down to to get the ball  he got the ball in his mouth  and gave it to the boy the boy kicked it and the puppy ran after it he kept falling but he got the ball and closed himself in the  brown light box he kept moving everywhere until the box came of the dog the dog runned back to the boy and gave the ball to the boy he got kind of happy and got his  crunches when he got up the puppy was looking at him but the boy went next to the door and the dog followed him the boy opened it a little  and  the cute little dog  pushed the  door  the whole way and opened it. The boy said mum we will be outside and they went outside to play 

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